Tyler   P.

7th-Grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

This year my writing has really progressed and has become better and more realistic.

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

My writing strength is that I can set the scene of the story well. As a visual thinker it's hard to put my ideas into words but when I do it makes my writing a lot better.

3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

My writing skill I want to develop is making sure everything makes sense. Sometimes I put all my writing ideas on paper and it makes sense to me but nobody else understands it.  I also want to develop my intros and conclusions because they aren't good and the hardest part is to start and end stories and

4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

My favorite essay that shows my growth is the heroes journey essay because it shows that I can use outlines and write introductions and conclusions.

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

I'm most proud of my Holocaust writing because I put a lot of effort into research and making sure everything was realistic and vivid. I'm also proud of it because I had to put myself in another persons shoes and write as them.

Artifact #1

Letter #5



March 7, 1941

Hallo,

We got to our camp. Auschwitz-Birkenau is it’s name. When I first arrived there, I was seperated from my wife and daughter. I couldn’t stand it. I had never been away from my family for more than 2 days. And I know that it will be much longer than 2 days.

They shaved my head and tattooed me. They gave me striped pajamas and sent me off. Everybody looked alike and I thought they might’ve been clones. It was insane. The most mental idea, had been put into action. The camp is packed with 3 story bunks and barely enough room to move. I have been forced to do labor before and they work you until you can no longer move.

We get a half-liter of really fake coffee for breakfast, a liter of watery soup for lunch, and for dinner we get about 300 grams of black bread, with about 25 grams of sausage, cheese, marmalade, or margarine. I feel slow and am almost about to vomit my insides out due to the low-nutrition food and am waiting to die. Thousands of people are being extracted from the group and being killed. The place is run down, nasty, and muddy. We get thirty minutes in the latrines a day and there’s no privacy whatsoever. I clean myself with the dirty waste water and leave. It smells like a mixture of barf and rotten eggs. Everywhere.

I met a guy named Jack, and became friends with him real quick. (First thing he said was “We are now friends.” He just happened to be a Jew visiting Germany to see his relatives, then got caught up in this murdering festival. I knew him for 2 days, then the Nazi’s shot him. I promise not to make any more friends and to keep my secrets to myself. The only freedom I have is in my brain, and I don’t intend to give it up.

The only thing I want is food, water and Hitler’s death.

Viel Gluck,

Raphael

Artifact #2

Tyler Peery

Late 2013

Period 4

The world in The Giver by Lois Lowry is a dystopia because the people are mindless, and the world they gave up is not worth the community they made.

The people have no feelings or human traits, give up too much, and without feelings, life is not life. When Jonas is about to turn twelve, his parents say, “ what’s important is the preparation for the adult life, and the training you’ll receive in your assignment ”(17). This implies that the people there only have one role, which is to keep the community going, then grow up and die. People are not passionate, desperate, and are not loving or caring. This is bad because the people do not have feelings. Next, when the Giver talks about everything the community gives up, he says “Climate Control. Snow made growing food difficult, limited the agricultural periods. And unpredictable weather made transportation almost impossible at times. It wasn't a practical thing, so it became obsolete when we went to Sameness.”(83-84). This means that the community does not have anything special, and live in a lifeless fishbowl. The community gives up feelings, color, and climate. And they only gained not having bad things, which only would have happened to a small percentage of people. People have not known any other life besides the Giver and Jonas. This is horrible because they are not human, and do not have feelings.

Lois Lowry wants the reader to feel how lucky they are, and also wants the reader to feel more grateful.

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