Ryan E.

7th-Grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it at the end of the ear.

A: At the Beginning of the year, I could get my point across but my writing style was not as advanced.

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

A: I Consider supporting my argument, establishing my thesis, and smooth transitions my writing strengths, because they come very easy.

3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explai.

A: I think i need to develop skills on writing my conclusions, because i'm not that good at tying  things together .

4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

A: I think that my Walrus and the Carpenter essay best captures my growth as a writer and a thinker because I connected something very fictional to something in the real world, and I think my message was logical

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

I am most proud of my Genocide article because I think I put a lot of thought into it, and got my point across strong.

Artifact #1

                                             Walrus and the Carpenter analysis

Things that are too good to be true usually have a trick behind them. This can be in forms of companies offering things that seem impossible, for practically nothing. Some authors have written satires about this. In “The Walrus and the Carpenter”, Lewis Carroll emphasizes the theme of things that seem too good to be true usually have trick behind them, and makes it accessible to children by using repetition and pathos.

First, carroll uses repetition to make the message accessible to children, so they can access the theme. In the first few stanzas, the Walrus is trying to convince the oysters to come with him and he says this, “A pleasant walk, a pleasant talk... ”.(33). Carroll uses repetition, repeating the same word, for two different reasons. First, he makes the poem appealing to kids. By making it sound like a nursery rhyme, and translating it to a kid friendly language he makes kids think deeper about the message inside the poem. He makes them think about how the Walrus convinces them to go outside of their safe place, and go into danger and unknown, which leads into the second reason. Carroll wants kids to know when a company, or anyone is trying to manipulate them. He is trying to prepare them for their future, and make it so they can understand the message like adults. That is why he uses repetition in his poem.

Next, Carroll uses Pathos to show how companies will try to draw people in and keep them there by making you feel safe and welcome. When the oysters are getting worried about getting eaten the Walrus says this, “After such kindness/ that would be a dismal thing to do!”(81/82). This is definitely a metaphor for companies luring people in and keeping them there. They will offer an amazing deal, and if someone gets worried, they will be reassured using pathos. Carroll speaks, or writes on this issue, by using the metaphor, Carroll reveals what people will do to trick other people. Carroll wants people to be aware of what people will do for their money, or anything of value and that is one reason why he wrote “The Walrus and the Carpenter”.

In conclusion, things that are too good to be true usually have a trick behind them. Carroll uses repetition to prove this point, and makes it so children can have access to it . He is one author who has done this to satirize what companies have done. Carroll wants people to know what companies will do to trick people. He uses this poem to convince people how they should think and act around things that are too good to be true.

Artifact #2

                                                      We've done to little to late

About 20 years ago, the bloodiest genocide since the Holocaust started in Africa. Called ‘The Second Congo War’, the Democratic Republic of the Congo Genocide(s) have no real target, but everyone involved just sees it as them against the world. About 20 different groups, including the infamous LRA are all involved. The genocide has officially ended, but in 2010 the UN released a report stating that genocide is still going on in the Congo.

In 2010, the United Nations Office of the High Commissioner for Human Rights, (or OHCHR) released a 566-pg. report on the mapping of human rights violations in the Congo. This report states that “the vast majority of the 617 most serious incidents (of human rights abuses) described in the mapping report point to the commission of multiple violations of human rights and/or international humanitarian law, which may constitute crimes against humanity or war crimes, and often both at the same time.” It also states that “the apparent systematic and widespread attacks described in this report reveal a number of inculpatory elements that, if proven before a competent court, could be characterised as crimes of genocide.”

This means that we as a world know that a genocide is going on, but aren’t really doing anything to stop it. We need to get active. The UN are being selfish and irrational by refusing to do anything. The UN security council system is not being very effective. There are 5 permanent countries, and 10 elected. The countries usually have conflicting interests, and when they almost get to an agreement their term is up.

The UN army is definitely big enough to help with this. It has about 100,000 troops, some of those medics and support troops. This could be very helpful when apprehending the guilty parties of the genocide. When we hear about genocide, UN needs to send troops to investigate.

The famous viral video ‘KONY 2012’, detailing the activities of the LRA, (a militant group which forcibly ‘recruits’ children and raises them as soldiers), and their leader Joseph Kony ended up stoking the USA to action, mounting an attack against the LRA. Though the LRA is still operating, this is a prime example of what can happen should we be inspired to take action and react to the world around us. This was the first time in US history that we did something international, not because it was in our interests, but because the people demanded it. This shows that we can make a change. So why haven’t we?

This has not happened because the UN can’t agree on anything and the government are worried that if they send in armed forces it will hurt their country’s military. This is not true for the United States. We have scores of troops in places that they don't need to be. There are 138 troops deployed in Canada, 9,501 troops deployed in the UK and 40,000 in Germany. That is 2,000 more than in the only active combat zone, Afghanistan where there are 38,000 troops deployed. We have none deployed in the Congo.

We need to put more troops in places where they can do some more help. Terrorist groups in the Congo are still at large, killing, kidnapping and torturing civilians left and right, with no end in the foreseeable future. If we pulled just in total 3,000 troops from these locations and used them to hunt down the LRA, we could put an end this. With all our surveillance systems and methods to capture terrorists, we could have the LRA destroyed by the end of the summer.

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