William C.

7th-Grade English Prtfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

Writing in the beginning of the year was tough. In sixth grade the standards were much lower.  This year I really stepped up my game.

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

Probably the starts of the writing assignment. I really like starting them out.
3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

The content of my writing. I always get stuck and don't get good evidence or what i'm trying to write down.

4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a write ...

My holocaust letter because it was super fun to write.

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

My walrus and the carpenter essay. Because it was my favorite and I really understood what to write.

Artifact #1

November 10, 1938

Hello Jacqueline,

Kristallnacht was terrifying. Most of what I remember was the screaming and the guns going off. I hope nothing bad has happened to you. The day of the attack, the germans were trying to force my dad’s boss to sell his company to them but he refused. My dad told us at dinner, “If my boss doesn't sell the company, I think the Germans will go through the records and find out that it is a jewish company.” If they find out that we are Jewish they will send us away. I hoped that my dad’s boss would agree to sell.

The night of kristallnacht was awful. My family snuck down into the basement and we hid there for the whole night. As we descended, I remember that my dad said “everything is going to be OK.” All night I was terrified thinking about what was happening outside and wondering if anyone was being hurt. We heard shouting and the sound of shattering glass but finally we fell asleep.

When we got out of the basement, our house was ransacked. All of my things were gone and all of our silverware and plates were stolen. Then my dad rushed to his office and returned with revolting news. The whole building was ransacked, it’s windows shattered, and his boss was dead in his office, shot several times. My awful question was answered. People had been hurt, and this was a start of a war. Please write back soon.


John Muller

Artifact #2

Ever wonder why some people are vegetarians? It is because they do not want to be a predator. Predators kill to get their food and some people despise killing animals. In "the Walrus and the Carpenter," Lewis Carroll emphasizes the theme of the sadness of the predator/prey relationship by using pathos and personification.

Carroll uses personification to make the oysters seem like little children to make the reader like them. After the Walrus asks them to walk, the oysters come out "All eager for a treat: Their coats were brushed, their faces washed, Their shoes were clean and neat" (49 - 52). When Carroll says "eager for a treat," all of the oysters are yipping and yapping about how happy they are. They are all neat, brushed and ready to go like little children. He does this to make the reader like the oysters. Later, the oysters will be killed by the Walrus who is their predator. The reader feels sad because the oysters are like children.

Carroll also uses pathos to show how miserable the relationship is between the oysters and the walrus. When the walrus is eating the oysters, he cries out "'I weep for you' the Walrus said: 'I deeply sympathize'" (97, 98). When the walrus says this he is stating that he feels sorry for the oysters. He is sorry because he has tricked the oysters and is eating them. This shows how the predator may feel sorry about killing its prey. The whole situation may end up sad, even for the predator.

In conclusion, Lewis Carroll's poem shows the sadness of the predator/prey relationship in life. He uses personification to make the reader feel sad for the prey. He also uses pathos to tell how the predator may feel sad. But, predators must eat so life repeats this sad story over and over again.

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