Regan A.

7th-Grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

I was the type of writer who had difficult time coming up with ideas for my essay. Lots of the times I would have to come up with more ideas. Now, it is a bit easier for me to come up with some ideas and I don't really have to expand on my ideas.


2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

My best writing strength is, have my essay organized and the format it is suppose to be in. It is good to have an organized essay, so the essay makes sense and it is not out of order. When ever I have a writing assignment, I always have my planner and draft organized.


3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

I want to develop, expanding my essays and ideas while writing it. Coming up and expanding ideas is one of the hardest parts for me. If I keep trying to work hard, I'll be able to be good at expanding and coming up with ideas.


4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

The writing project that captures my writing growth is my Holocaust essay. I had my best score/grade I ever got on any of my essays. This essay also shows how much I have improved in writing.

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

The writing piece I am most proud of this year is The Walrus and The Carpenter. This essay show how much I have improved through out the beginning of the semester. It was the best essay I have written during the first semester.

Artifact #1

Holocaust Pen-Pal Project - Final Assessment

Letter #6

Dear Ebi,

We are now five years after the Holocaust. My father, brother, and I are now in the United States of America. We live in a lovely home and my dad is working for a metal factory. My brother and I ended up going to an American public school. I have made many new friends that are both Americans and some Holocaust survivors. Often we relate and listen to each other’s stories. It felt amazing going back to school again and not worrying about working in a factory and seeing death all around. While it has been good, it also has been very difficult to get used to our new life here. I speak very little English, so school is hard, making friends is not easy, even getting on the right bus can be a problem.

It has been hard not to see my mother or my sister. I wished that they could see what I am seeing. Both, my mother and my sister did not survive, they died of starvation and malnutrition. I think of all of the memories I had with the both them every day. I will always miss going to the theater and going out to eat with them. My heart is broken, but each day it gets better and better. We thought they were sent to a “better” camp somewhere else, but my father heard the news from an old family friend.

Looking back and remembering the days before we were liberated, we knew the Allies were getting closer and there was something wrong. There was a lot shootings going on but my brother and I were able to hide. We hid not knowing what was going on and we did not want to come out for the fear of being shot. I don’t remember for how long we hid, but we did not make a sound or come out because we were afraid the Germans would spot us and we’d be shot. Someone spotted us and we were so afraid that we would die. Then out of nowhere a hand reached out to us, to take our hands and help us. It turned out to be a Soviet soldier who came to save us. It felt kind of weird and I wasn’t super sure if the soldier was actually saving my brother and I or if he was sending us to a killing center.

After the Soviet soldier got us to our feet, he took us to a safe environment. We were surrounded by other people at a new camp and I heard my name being called.

“ Annie, Annie.” I was getting closer to the voice and it was my dad. My brother and I ran towards him and we gave him a big hug. I was very thrilled to see him alive and safe. I did not want to let go of him, and my tears of joy ran down his jacket. At one time I had thought I’d never see him again. I felt great joy knowing my brother and I were together with him again.

Yours Truly,

Annie

Artifact #2

Trusting strangers can be very dangerous. Being with a stranger can be dangerous. They can be sneaky and manipulative. In “The Walrus and the Carpenter”, Lewis Carroll emphasizes the theme of not trusting strangers by using personification and pathos.

First Carroll uses personification to make the poem engaging for children. When the eldest oyster gives a hint not to listen to the walrus to the young oysters, “Eldest oyster winked his eye” (7). The author engages children by using personification. The oyster winking his eye entertains children. It entertains children because when you wink at someone, that means the person likes you. He uses a kid poem to send a message while entertaining children.

Carroll also uses pathos to prove that strangers are manipulative and sneaky. When the walrus is about to eat the oysters, he says, “I weep for you” walrus said/ “I deeply sympathize” (17-18). The author discribes how strangers are manipulative and sneaky using pathos. I weep for you and I sympathize is telling the oysters that he cares for them, when he really wants to eat them. The walrus ends up eating the oysters. This reveals that people and kids should not trust strangers. The walrus, gets the oysters thinking them that they are perfectly safe around the walrus and tricking them of having a get together feast time, when the are really the food of the feast.

In conclusion, Carroll uses personification and pathos to state the theme of not trusting strangers. Carroll uses pathos and personification to send a message and to entertain children. Do not trust people that are manipulative.

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