Daniel-Pablo

7th-Grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

At the beginning of the year I would describe my writing as dull. Now as I enjoy writing more, I find it more natural and easy to do. Because of this, i believe my writhing has improved over the year.

I consider one of my writing strengths to be making the reader think. by this I mean that i pose intriguing questions and thought-provoking ideas that the reader has probably never heard before,

the writing skill I most need to work on is probably making sloppy mistakes in my capitalization, grammar, punctuation, and spelling.

The piece of writing from this year best captures my growth as a writer and thinker, would be "The Walrus and the Carpenter" analysis.

The piece of writing from this year are I am most proud of is my Holocaust pen pal essay.

Artifact #1

There is a common thing said among mothers: “If your friend jumps off a cliff, would you do the same?” Mothers say this for two reasons. Their child is doing something bad influenced by a friend, and they want to put a stop to it. In “The Walrus and the Carpenter” by Lewis Carroll, oysters are being deceived by the Walrus, while the Elder Oyster is Trying to bring them to reason. Carroll uses personification and Logos to make this children’s poem carry a serious message: Only trust the respected.

First, he uses personification to make his poem universal to all ages. When Carroll is describing the moon’s opinion of the sun, he writes, “The moon was shining sulkily” (7). By doing this he creates a whimsical fairyland-ish setting, and also introduces a conflict right at the beginning of the poem. This shows that Lewis Carroll can make even the smallest detail of a fairyland-ish whimsical poem complex, with multiple things happening at once. The most fascinating thing, is that he does it in a very straight-forward way, so even a child could understand it. It also pulls the reader in, so he can convey a message later on.

Carroll has the Walrus use logos to show that strangers may look trustworthy and reasonable, when they may not be. When the Walrus is convincing the oysters to ‘walk and talk’ he says, “We cannot do with more than four / To give a hand to each” (35-36). This seems very logical, mostly because it is true. The Walrus and the Carpenter have four hands combined. In that respect it is logos. However, it could also be said that it is a very devious form of reverse psychology. Naturally the oysters would want the ‘honor’ of walking with the Walrus. In that respect, the Walrus could definitely be considered a ‘wolf in a sheep’s clothing’. This shows That strangers can be devious.

Lewis Carroll uses personification and logos to convey the moral (the Duchess’ favorite word in Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland) of looking out for wolves in sheeps’ clothing. Having said all that, always follow the Elder Oyster.

Artifact #2

Dear Gitta,

When we arrived at Plaszow, there were just three of us. Jacob had died on the train. We were immediately separated into groups of men, women, and children. This meant I was separated from both of my parents. After this, my hair was shaved. All of it. Simply gone down the drain, leaving me with an itchy, exposed scalp, already freezing from the cold.

By the time we were registered, it was already ten o‘clock, and I was exhausted. My group was escorted to our sleeping quarters. Expecting, well, a bed, I was shocked to see that we were sleeping in bunks with no mattresses at all. there at least forty stacks of three bunks in a room which was obviously used to be a barn. It still reeked of horse. I was bunked with a muscular and nasty girl named Lilly. I was going to climb up to the the top bunk but Lilly beat me to it. I guess I am lucky though. A lot of girls had to sleep on the floor.

Just when I was drifting off to sleep, I heard cry. A prisoner was roaming around the camp calling for his mother. After a loud bang, the sound stopped. He was dead now. I asked one of the girls in my row of bunks; “Who just shot him?” She responded more to herself then to me; “Please, no more target practice!” I was later informed that the commander in charge of the camp targeted Jews to practice his gunman-ship from his balcony. This information brought me close to tears, because if Jacob died at the hands of an ruthless Nazi commander, it would be even worse than the way he did die.

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