Hong Kong protest

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2 years ago
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Many students disagree with the structure of how to be successful. They aren’t happy with the test nor the voting rights. They are leaving what they are doing behind to show the CCP their potential. In the midst of everything that is happening, the students want change and will stop at nothing to get it. Thousands of protesters in Hong Kong show determination of political change for education and future economic growth but the outcome may lead to economic problems that cause it to completely shut down itself.
Many protester’s fear of their future about the education system and the policies of voting, causes an uproar because the control of their life isn’t in their hands. Thousands of protesters are occupying main areas of the city and keeping their hope alive for political change. Many of the protesters aren’t happy about the education system in Hong Kong because everyone has to take the same test and score above a certain point to get into great colleges. Because a test determines everything, the students don’t have any input on their life and are looking for a change in their future by creating a union. To get this future everyone talks about, Joshua says, “In a world where ideas and ideals flow freely, we want what everybody else in an advanced society seems to have a say in our future”, which concludes the reason why the union of students are protesting (Joshua Wong Chi-Fung, Taking back Hong Kong). On top of the educational demands, protesters are hung on the fact that Beijing is creating suffrage to those who wish to vote for their own leader. The students want to freely elect Hong Kong’s leaders and choose their own future as Joshua says, “Beijing claims to be giving us one person, one vote, but a plan in which only government-approved candidates can run for election does not equal universal suffrage” (Joshua Wong Chi-Fung, Taking back Hong Kong). By voting for the leader, the protesters can decide their own future instead of other deciding for them; however, their parents are the only exception when it comes to their future. The protests are causing damage to not only the roads and Hong Kong, many families of the protesters and relatives also were damaged by their children.
The opposition of the protests are trying to maintain the protests and see how they can stop it as violence and damages are forming throughout Hong Kong. Many protesters left their university classes just to take on the streets to bring the Chinese country to recognize them. Their parents who have worked really hard to get them their are going to disappointed in their children because they are wasting their opportunity. Many of the student’s parents oppose the protest and resent their kids, and the kids “Return home to criticism for fighting for democracy, and many end up having to lie to their parents about how they are spending their evenings” (Joshua Wong Chi- Fung, Taking back Hong Kong) which tells us that most of the parents don’t even know that their childrens are protesting. Even though the parents are obviously not supporting their children, the students are still demanding rights. The parents are not only the opposing threat. The disorganised Chinese Communist Party is also challenged to respond to the riots of the uncontrollable youth. Even though that the CCP isn’t responding to the students about any change, they are also fighting to keep the protest under control before it goes out of hand. It doesn’t look like the CCP is going to respond to the protesters in a way that will change the structure of the test that has been around for many years. If the CCP hasn’t said anything back to the protesters until now, it is very hard to say that they will do anything any time soon.
In conclusion, the causes of the protest are very understandable because when everything in the student’s life is turning upside down, they still fight for their right to believe in change. The lack of money and opportunity to be a successful person in the future is in the student’s hands; however, they chose it to use it on protests and damage. This is a rough turn for the CCP because if they choose to listen to the students, it would seem as if they aren’t as powerful or important as everyone thinks they are. However, if they don’t choose to listen, the protests would cause a riot which would damage streets/ houses/ churches/ or other living spaces. At the end, I believe that the CCP would do nothing to stop the protesters. Because of that, the economy would completely shut down and close.

2 years ago
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PARA 1. Many students: insert "Hong Kong" so the reader know exactly what you are talking about.

PARA 1. "show determination of political change" - AWKWARD

PARA 1. "it to completely shut down itself" -- What is "it"? The protests will be shut down?

PARA 2. Many protester’s - NO APOSTROPHE

2 years ago
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PARA 2. “In a world where ideas and ideals flow freely, we want what everybody else in an advanced society seems to have a say in our future”, which concludes the reason why the union of students are protesting...

Separate your analysis of the quote into a separate sentence.

PARA 2. "protesters are hung on the fact that Beijing is creating suffrage" --- creating suffrage and hung on are awkward phrasings

END OF PARA 2: "The protests are causing damage to not only the roads and Hong Kong, BUT many families of the protesters and relatives also were damaged by their children.

2 years ago
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BEGINNING OF PARA 3:" The opposition of the protests are trying to maintain the protests and see how they can stop it as violence..." WORDING

PARA 3: Their parents who have worked really hard to get them their are going to disappointed -- WORDING

PARA 3: "Many of the student’s parents" -- STUDENTS' - plural possessive

PARA 3: “Return home to criticism for fighting for democracy, and many end up having to lie to their parents about how they are spending their evenings” (Joshua Wong Chi- Fung, Taking back Hong Kong) which tells us that most of the parents don’t even know that their childrens are protesting.

AGAIN - Use separate sentences to analyze quotation.

PARA BREAK NEEDED WHEN YOU MOVE FROM PARENTS TO CCP IN FINAL PARAGRAPH