Ellie J.

7th-Grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

My writing at the begging of the year was fine but needed improvement. I was lacking correct grammar and punctuation in my writing. During the course of this year I have improved all my punctuation and grammar problems and in addition expanded my sensory and context writing.

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

My strengths as a writer I think include write an interesting hook and being able to explain a quote with context. Both of these re new strengths that I have acquired this year.

3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

I want to keep improving my ability to write persuasive essays. I think that the way I analysis and explain evidence could use some work so that the evidence is really strong and supports my topic.

4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

I think my Walrus and the Carpenter essay really shows how my writing grew this year. The topic was not as straight forward and literal as the other topic we had previously done. I was still able to explain it thoroughly and in a way that makes sense.

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

The piece of writing I am most proud of from this year is my Holocaust Letter. I think I did a really good job using sensory words and painting a picture of something that is very hard to understand.

Artifact #1

Walrus and the Carpenter

Power is something that can either be humbling of corrupting. It gives one the option to help the less fortunate, or to take advantage of them through the authority they have. Lewis Carroll uses personification and pathos in “The Walrus and the Carpenter” to emphasize the theme that people in power should not abuse it.

First, Carroll uses personification to to make the poem more relatable to kids. When the Walrus tricks the little oysters into coming with him, the eldest oyster just “winked his eye” (45). Personification is when human-like qualities are taken on by non human things. Carroll is giving the oysters and the Walrus human like qualities to make the poem more understandable to kids. It makes the story more interesting and creative. The story hides a serious message in a light poem so readers find it more enthralling. The animals being human like adds that lightness.

Lewis Carroll has the Walrus use pathos to trick the oysters into doing what he wants. When the Walrus is convincing the oysters to come along with him he uses pathos and emotion, saying “‘O oysters come walk with us!’/The Walrus said beseech” (36-37). Beseech means to as somebody urgently or fervently to do something. The Walrus uses this he rushes the oysters, not giving them time to think about what their doing. The Walrus is a symbol is a symbol and his actions are the authors message. The Walrus represents adults abusing their power to trick kids.

Carroll uses personification and pathos to highlight the message people in power should not abuse it. Giving human like qualities to the poem gave it a lighter mood and more interesting for kids to read. Using pathos, the author shows people with authority to trick the less fortunate. Just because someone has authority does not mean they can be trusted.

Artifact #2

Dear Ioseph and Asher,

I have not forgotten my roots, I am a proud Jew and will be until my death, liberated or not. The obstacles that have made life hard have only made me stronger, they have made the Jews as a group stronger. I do believe we will be saved, and again we won’t have to hide the religion that binds us together and keeps our faith alive. Keeping this in mind, I enter the camp.

I made my way through the smelly crowd, being pushed and tripped by the soldiers. Sharp barbed wire fences lock us in, reminding us we had no freedom. Somebody grabbed my shoulder from behind, tearing me away from Luca and pushing me into an isolated line for the showers. Just then, out of the corner of my eye, I saw him, my mystery man. I just had to talk to him, he might not be here tomorrow, or I might not be. When the guard turned his back I managed to slip away to behind the showers. He met me there moments later.

“I can't believe its really you” he murmured, making sure we wouldn't be caught. Then, for a mere ten minutes, all my troubles slipped away as I talked to him, Shivan.

Abruptly, screams erupted behind us from the showers, then slowly died out to a explosive silence. Later, I learned they had been gassed, and if not for Shivan that would have been me.

Within my first few days here I have learned a whole new meaning of horrible. Meals barley consist of food, always rotten,and my bed is the ground. When I lay my head down at night I can hear rats scurrying around the room.

One day I was approached by a guard, he quickly handed me something and walked away. “A letter from my brothers!” I whispered excitedly, so nobody would discover and confiscate my treasure. It was the happiest I have felt in my life. They are in a work camp in Poland and I have no need to worry( I know that is a lie). When the war ends they swear they will find me and we will be safe again. I look forward to introducing them to Luca, he warmed up to Shivan after he heard how he saved my life. It was the end of the letter that brought a halt to my happiness, Will and Thomas were gone. Will was killed in an uprising in his ghetto and Thomas died of disease. A pain like no other consumed me, but I guess I’m lucky, its a miracle I have four brothers left.

The days only get harder, I'm stuck in a stuffy factory making uniforms for Nazi soldiers and never getting to rest. I am so tired of this war, somebody liberate us! Asher I’m so sorry about your brother and you're not alone you have me and Ioseph. As for you Ioseph, well I don't know, stay safe and write soon.



Holocaust Letter

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