Javid A

7th grade English Porfolio

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

At the beginning of the year I would just write I was told to. My writing would be exactly to the guidelines and would have less creativity. For our current writing project there are almost no guidelines and it is anywhere as hard as it would have been at the beginning of the year.  

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

I am good at writing book report type essays. The type where you just state the facts. When you don't need to express your opinion in your writing.

3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

I need to get better at writing narrative pieces. I think I am good at informative writing but not as much with narrative writing. If I get better at writing narrative I will become an all around better writer.

4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

I think my Holocaust letter best shows my growth because at the beginning of the year I would have never been able to write something like this.

5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

I am most proud of my Holocaust letter because it shows the most growth.

My Portfolio Refection

Artifact #1

(This letter was meant to be from one Jewish prisoner to another during WWII)

I hope you are doing ok, I know I am not. This place is so inhumane and frightening, it doesn't seem like a place where humans are meant to live. I have seen people have killed just for going to the water pump without permission. I have heard thousands of people are being caught and killed. I can’t believe the Allies waited this long before they started trying to help, it might be too late.

When we first got here they told us there was an overload of people so we couldn’t be processed. I have no idea what that meant so I didn’t care. They kept our group together in a storage shed until we could be processed. When they called us, they shaved off all of our hair and they let the weak and sick people go to take a shower.

“That didn’t really seem like the real Nazis,” I thought “Oh well, might as well let them do something good in their lives”.

It is strange though, because they never came back, maybe they went to a different part of the camp? There is this one section where nobody is allowed to go, maybe thats where they went.

I thought this place was going to be terrible, but this isn’t really as bad as people say. When new arrivals come I get to sort through all their belongings that they brought with them. Sometimes, when I am not being watched, I can take stuff for myself. One day, I found a pair of gold earrings. When no one was looking, I took them. Later that day when the guard was passing out food I took him aside and gave him the earrings. He gave me almost thirty times as much food as everyone else! Now every time I get something valuable, I give it to the guard and I am well-fed. Everyone else here is miserable. They make you work all day with extremely little food. Many people are cramped into tiny sleeping quarters and disease is rampant. Even now that I have more food I doubt I will make it out alive.

I hope you get this letter, I heard the Germans are searching everything. If you do get this please reply would really like to know how the other Jews are doing. I hope we can still stay in touch. I wish you the best of luck surviving.

Your friend, Jacob Daniels.

Artifact #2

(the walrus and the carpenter this is a poem analysis (see link))

You should never trust strangers, even if they offer you what you want. This poem uses personification and ethos to to prove it. It is personification and ethos that make this poem effective. In “the Walrus and the Carpenter,” by Lewis Carroll, emphasizes why you should not talk to strangers by using personification and ethos.

First, Carroll uses personification to make the poem seem more realistic and kid friendly. One way Carroll uses personification is when the Walrus and the Carpenter were talking, “We were walking close at hand” (20). Having animals walking and talking gives them a human feel. This makes the poem kid friendly, every kid show or book has personification. Without using personification the poem would be creepy and Carroll could not put it in a children's book. By using personification Carroll makes the poem kid friendly.

Carroll uses ethos to prove why you should not talk to strangers even if they offer you what you want. When the Walrus says, “O Oysters come walk with us” (31). When the Walrus says this he is trying to make himself seem trustworthy. This is why the Oysters follow him. If he had not said this then the oysters would not have followed him. They would not have gotten out of the water to follow just anybody. That is how the Walrus effectively uses ethos.

In this poem, Carroll uses personification and ethos to prove why you should not talk to strangers. When he uses personification he shows how you do you should not trust anyone no matter how they look. Then he uses ethos to show how you should not fully trust anybody you do not know. This is how Carroll uses personification and ethos to prove his point.

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