Zharit B.

7th-grade English Portfolio

My Portfolio Reflection

1. How would you describe your writing at the beginning of the year and how would you describe it now?

I think my writing has been getting a lot better since the beginning of the year. Like Mrs. Ellis would say I would ramble a lot. I think that is one of the things I have improved in a lot. Now my writing makes sense and my punctuation is in the right place.

2. What do you consider your writing strengths? Explain.

I am really good at coming up with Topic sentences, but mostly with the hooks. At the beginning I struggle but then I get more and more ideas so I come up with really good ones .

3. What writing skills do you need and/or want to continue to develop next year? Explain.

I think I still need to work on my punctuation because, sometimes my writing does not make sense so I feel like I did a bad job in the whole essay or project.


4. What piece of writing from this year best captures your growth as a writer and thinker? Explain why.

I think my best piece of writing this year is the Walrus and the Carpenter essay because I came up with a really good topic sentence and I didn't really ramble on it so I was proud of myself.
5. What piece of writing from this year are you most proud of? Explain why.

I am mostly proud of my Holocaust letter assignment because I have a lot of info in there I read and Looked at a lot of stuff about it because I liked to learn about it. It is interesting.

Artifact #1

                                                                Hero’s Journey Essay

Bravery is not something all people have, but it is something all people can earn. Ponyboy was brave and so was Johnny while going through the hero’s Journey. They did go through many challenges but they passed. They didn’t only save themselves, but also other people. The outsiders By S.E. Hinton is a monomyth because, Pony is going through the Hero’s Journey.

Ponyboy experiences The Initiation first when Johnny cut and bleached Pony’s hair, he did that so that they wouldn’t recognize him. Also when the church got on fire they went and saved the children. Pony got out of the car and went running to the burning church, Johnny following him and Dally cursing them for being “Stupid”. So he said, “ ‘I bet we started it’ I said to Johnny. ‘We must have dropped a lighted cigarette or something.’” (pg.91). In the Hero’s Journey, the first part of The Initiation is when the hero faces the challenges and some of them might change his life. In The Outsiders, Pony’s Initiation happens when he goes through cutting his hair and saving the children from the burning church, going to the hospital and finally going back home. In a symbolic way, Pony cutting his hair is the beginning of the Initiation. During the Fire, because no one knew who started the fire, they could’ve run away and pretend it never happened so that they wouldn’t get in trouble. They didn’t, they went into the church and chose to be good and save the children. This then puts Pony in a path where he has to learn how to appreciate what he has at home, and just because his brother is always screaming he shouldn’t run away.

In conclusion, The Outsiders is a monomyth, because Johnny and Pony went through the Hero’s journey. First Johnny kills Bob, so Pony and him have to run away. Second the church got on fire so they saved the children. Third Pony and Johnny become heroes, then Johnny and Dally die. At the end almost everything goes back to normal when pony goes back to his known world. What S.E. Hinton was trying to prove is that people should start appreciating what they have. People miss what they once they don’t.  

Artifact #2

                                                     Walrus and the Carpenter Essay

A word of Wisdom,“Do not be so gullible around people.” Why would people be gullible either way, yes they do it to try to be nice but then that might get them somewhere really bad or in trouble. People should pay attention to people that love them not to strangers. In “ The Walrus and The Carpenter” Lewis Carroll emphasizes the theme do not believe everything people may say, by using Personification and Pathos.

First, Carroll uses personification to make it appropriate and nice for little kids. When Carroll describes how is night and the moon was shining very bright he says, “ The moon was shining sulkily,/ because she thought the sun/ had got no business to be there, after the day was done--” (line 7-10). Carroll writes that the sun was shining at night. That is personification, because the moon can not think the sun. Also the sun appears in the day not the night. The whole poem attracts the the children and maybe help them get the message in the poem. This is a very fun poem for the kids and the theme might help them later in life to succeed and be careful.

Carroll also uses pathos to show emotion on the poem and emphasizes the theme of do not be so gullible. When Carroll is saying that The Walrus ate the Oysters, he shows emotion by saying, “ ‘I weep for you,’ the walrus says:/ ‘I deeply sympathize.’” This quote is an example of pathos. It is an example because The Walrus “supposedly” feels bad that he ate the Oysters.The oysters thought that the Walrus was going to take them on a walk and get something to eat. The oysters did not trust the oldest oysters so the oysters did not eat, but they got eaten. Another way of saying this is not everyone is trustworthy so make good logical choices.

In conclusion, like Lewis Carroll tried to say people should not trust everyone and people also, should not be so gullible around other people, because that might people in a bad position. Some of the things that Carroll did on the poem to try to emphasize the theme were, when the oldest oysters did not stand up because they knew that if they went something bad was going to happen. And another example was when the little oysters did not pay attention to the older ones. A connection would be a poem-to-world connection because tenagers and everyone is very gullible and believe everything other people say so then people see them in a bad position because they were gullible.

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