Revising/Editing A Short Story

REVISING                                          EDITING

MOVING SENTENCES                                  CAPITALIZATION   

CHANGE THINGS LIKE                                PUNCTUATION

* SENSORY LANGUAGE                                GRAMMAR

* VIVID VERBS                                     SPELLING

* TRANSITION WORDS                                 

* DIALOGUE

* VARIED DIALOGUE TAGS

* DESCRIPTIVE DETAILS   

* MAKE SURE CLIMAX IS CLEAR

PLOT

* EXPOSITION

* RISING ACTION

* CLIMAX

*

BY EMMA KYLA JASON CADE

steps

1. colored writing tool

2. re-read story

3. don't be over reward yourself

4. fix mistakes

5. re-read story again

6. fix mistakes you missed

positives

multiple perspectives and fix mistakes you did not see while reading.

negatives

some people do not take it serious those people do not help your writing get any better

rough draft

                                      

                              The Sister

“Slush” went the potion that Christine was stirring with her big long tall brown wooden spoon. Christine to use a latter to use her spoon to stir her potion in her tall black caldron. Christine is a bad fashionable girl and her sister cherry is the total opposite of Christine.

When cherry comes to visit her sister she goes in the basement and its really dark and gloomy I also really quiet and its smells old and moldy. Then Christine comes out, sees her sister and for no reason wraps her up in her old shaggy carpet with rope and cherry screams as loud as she can “Christine why are you doing this to me” then cherry sat there for a while then screamed at Christine “sis I have to go!” then Christine let her out to go and cherry went even though she did not have to go.

When cherry get out of the bathroom she goes up stairs and looked around thinking should I call the cops for my sister tying me up or should I not. It took cherry about five minutes to decided then she decided to turn her sister in. she was looking for the phone then when she found it she called the police and told them what her sister did to her.

When the police got to the house they headed to the basement and then Christine heard them and ran as fast as lighting and she herself in her big splintery room with all her stuff. Then the police gave her three chances to come out but she wouldn’t so they knocked down the door then she got arrested.

Then cherry says “I’ll take care of her house why she is in jail.” After forty five years of Christine being on jail cherry and Christine are no longer I a sister relationship so while Christine was in jail cherry or none of her friends came to visit her. Why cherry watched over Christine’s house cherry became more fashionable and Christine became dull.                    

final c

Comment Stream

2 years ago
1

This is for language arts hope you guys enjoy.

2 years ago
0

ya it really was good